Cate

1. Cate- Cate addresses the context of the passage. Cate does use literary devices to describe the events of the passage and its’ purpose. There is organization as she runs through the purpose of each line. She does not refer to authorial purpose, but the time does exceed ten minutes.media type="file" key="July's People.m4a"

Manuel's Review: Cate did a good job of providing the context of the scene, and how it relates to the rest of the novel. This allowed her to draw connections to the scene from the rest of the text, aiding in overall analysis of the scene.
 * Did the speaker address context? Purpose?**

She had a clear organized structure, as she went from line to line, discussing and interpreting the events and literary features used.
 * Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?**

How does syntax affect the way this scene is presented?
 * What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?**

She did an excellent job of proving WHY from the HOW. Authorial purpose was certainly the focus of the commentary.
 * What did the speaker do well?**

Cate said "uh" a lot. She needs to calm down a bit, and let it flow. This, however, did not detract from her ideas. There was an annoying scraping sound at random times. A dog? It was distracting.
 * What would you suggest for improvement?**

Cate could have exmained the importance of syntax and grammer and how it affects the relationship between Maureen and July. This reveals conflict between the two, and the complete lack of understanding and communication issues the two face.
 * What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.)**

I. 4/5 II. 7/10 III. 6/10 IV. 4/5
 * What would you score them based on the rubric?**

__Elliot's Review__ - Cate set the scene for what took place prior to her passage. The context she provided did in fact aid her commentary. Though Cate did discuss authorial purpose, referring to a distinct authorial purpose throughout the commentary (i.e. Nadine Gordimer uses this device to create this effect, which lends itself toward communicating this authorial purpose) would have greatly aided the overall continuity.
 * Did the speaker address context? Purpose?**

- The organization principle was to dissect the passage line by line, describing/interpreting the events and literary features inherent to the passage, and, at the end, commenting upon Nadine Gordimer's overarching goal in writing //July's People//.
 * Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?**

- What does this passage reveal about Maureen in context with this tense situation with July? What does Nadine Gordimer's sentence structure add to the passage? How does it help convey Nadine Gordimer's intentions and/or message in the novel?
 * What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?**

- Cate provided a detailed assessment of Gordimer's authorial purpose. She understood and interpreted the text of the passage well.
 * What did the speaker do well?**

- I would recommend that Cate discuss more literary features of the text and the state explicitly how they convey Gordimer's intentions.
 * What would you suggest for improvement?**

- Cate could have addressed July's dialect, the contrast between Maureen and July, external conflict, how the metaphors at the end characterize both Maureen and July, SYNTAX, the role reversal of whites and blacks, or the distortion of power, and the ensuing tension.
 * What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.)**

- I. Knowledge and Understanding: 3 - II. Interpretation and Personal Response: 7 - III. Presentation: 6 - IV. Use of Language: 4
 * What would you score them based on the rubric?**

Susu's Review Cate:

-//Did the speaker address context? Purpose?// Cate has one sentence dedicated to the context I found that this did not make a good transition into analyzing the commentary. She did not assert a purpose or main theme of the passage. Cate did however attempt to make up for this at the end of her commentary in the conclusion, which made for a muddled and irrelevant conclusion.

-//Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?// Cate went line by line. This worked very well in order to attack each of her points.

-//What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?// If I were the accessor I would have asked Cate to explain what she though the overall purpose of the passage was.

-//What did the speaker do well?// Cate was extremely thorough and well versed when it came to analyzing the diction used in the passage. For example, when she went to characterize the diction as ‘war-like’ during Maureen and July’s encounter, she demonstrated excellent understanding and appreciation of the text as well as original interpretation.

-//What would you suggest for improvement?// I would suggest for Cate to not try to categorize what complex characters such as July and Maureen feel with simple terms like ‘sad’ and ‘mad.’ This greatly undermines the text and also makes the wrong impression that as a reader Cate does not understand the complex nature of Maureen and July’s emotions. Instead I suggest that Cate analyzes the effects of Maureen’s statements about Ellen and stay away from elementary labels.

Peer-evaluation 1. Knowledge and Understanding of Extract or Works: 4 2. Interpretation and Personal Response: 7 3. Presentation: 7 4. Use of Language: 4