Effie

Reviewer - Manuel for July's People Maybe. There was an obvious structure throughout the whole 0 seconds I spent listening to this commentary. Can I hear your commentary? I wouldn't know. I suppose something. It'd be cool if I heard it. Uploading the commentary. Everything. I. 0/5 II. 0/10 III. 0/10 IV. 0/5
 * Did the speaker address context? Purpose?**
 * Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?**
 * What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?**
 * What did the speaker do well?**
 * What would you suggest for improvement?**
 * What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.)**
 * What would you score them based on the rubric?**

Reviewer- Will Carabasi Commentator- Effie 1. Did the speaker address context? Purpose? a. The context is addressed very nicely by the speaker. Effie mentions why this scene is going to take place by paying specific attention to the stabbing of Polonius, and the plan of the King to have Hamlet murdered. It is evident that Claudius wants to “kill his opponent rather than be killed by Hamlet.” The mindset of Hamlet is then addressed and leads directly into the first line of the play. The purpose, moreover, is also addressed by Effie during the context as she starts out with the mention of the theme; death and decay. This makes the scene easier to follow and relate back to the purpose of Shakespeare. 2. Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? a. The organization in this commentary is excellent. First, the context is addressed through the perspective of many important individuals. Then, the theme of death and decay is let out, helping the listener relate to the points made via literary devices. Effie makes it easy to follow by addressing the theme early on. 3. What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? a. Have Hamlet’s motives changed after being departed onto the boat to England? b. Were there any other themes addressed in this scene of the play? c. Why did Shakespeare choose to make this point through a soliloquy? 4. What did the speaker do well? a. The speaker was very well organized and included a good amount of literary terms. Effie spoke well and hardly ever slipped up. Her presentation was excellent. 5. What would you suggest for improvement? a. I would suggest tying the scene to Shakespeare himself. The “why” is evident for the play’s purposes and how Hamlet needed to finalize his motives, however, the “why” as far as authorial purpose is not very evident. 6. What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.) a. The speaker forgot to address the theme of a Rotten Denmark, and how Hamlet is leaving this place. Then through this soliloquy, the death that will take place in the final scene is foreshadowed, as death in Denmark occurs even further. Shakespeare cannot die in England, however, does right when he gets back to Denmark. 7. What would you score them based on the rubric? a. Knowledge- 4 b. Interpretation-7 c. Presentation- 5 d. Language- 4

Effie’s Commentary: You did a good job of giving context for your passage and presenting the distinction between Hamlet’s intentions and the author’s. Your line-by-line organizational pattern allowed you to make your point well, but because of the extent of your introduction, you did not allow yourself enough time to finish your commentary. Your pace was steady and coherent, and your vocabulary was appropriate and of high quality. You used a plethora of literary terms, and all in their appropriate place. The one thing I noticed was that you used the word “revenging” a few times (as it appeared in the text that way), but it should probably be “avenging”. Additionally, watch your pronunciation of “Gertrude” and “colloquial”. Your introduction was a bit lengthy, in both time and description – assume that your audience is familiar with the plot of the play. Also, you bring up a good point in that this soliloquy differs from Hamlet’s others, for it ends in a definite conclusion, but you did not supply a reason for this. Questions I would have asked you: Why is it that Hamlet arrives at a different conclusion than he does in his other soliloquies? What major theme of the play comes across in this passage? My Rubric grade: Knowledge and Understanding: 5/5 Interpretation and Personal Response: 9/10 Presentation: 8/10 Use of Language: 5/5 ~Jessi Milestone~