Ilya

media type="file" key="01 13 09 Ilya Kav commentary.m4a"Peer Editor: Jess Metlay Commentary: Illya


 * Review**: Illya did a good job of starting his podcast off by identifying what the central theme of the passage was intended to be. However Illya should have also provided more //context// for the play in this introduction so that the examiner/audience knows how the scene affects the play as a whole. Illya did a nice job in his line-by-line structure of not just repeating lines but of grouping together dialogue by speaker and only pointing out the most important points. Within this Illya also made sure to explain the meaning of the lines specifically as the lines related to the character development of the speaker (Hamlet’s dislike of Claudius for example). Illya pointed out the //literary devices// in about half of his examples so next time in order to better illustrate the authorial purpose he should try to specifically identify more literary devices in the lines he considers worth explaining. Building off of this idea Illya really needs to comment back on his original //theme// as he goes through the explanation of the dialogue in his line by line. While Illya established the theme of appearance versus reality right away he never really made a clear reference to it again. For instance he brought up an excellent point about Hamlet being unable to express his truth depth of emotion over the death of his father but did not directly explained the point within the context of his theme. Instead Illya seemed to develop as the podcast went along the idea that the passage was meant to illustrate the character of Hamlet and his relationship to Claudius and Gertrude. This was a very interesting interpretation and could have easily been brought back to Illya’s original theme of appearance versus reality. Another way in which Illya could have brought his commentary more cohesively together would have been by providing a conclusion at the end of his podcast to briefly reiterate the importance and //authorial purpose// of the passage. Overall: an interesting podcast that primarily could be improved by bring the dialogue back to the original authorial purpose/theme and identifying some additional literary devices

How does Hamlet’s attitude play into the theme of appearance versus reality? Why does Shakespeare make Hamlet the sole character to contradict Claudius; how does this color the reality versus appearance of the conversations between the two (i.e. what the conversation appears to be versus what each character is truly saying)?
 * Questions**: Why does Shakespeare have Hamlet act distant towards Claudius and Gertrude?

Interpretation-7 Presentation-3 Language-4
 * Score**: Knowledge-4

Did the speaker address context? Purpose? • Ilya did an excellent job addressing context, and also mentioned themes in other portions of the book that has lead up to his passage • Ilya’s analysis of purpose needs some improving

Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? • Ilya does his commentary in a linear manner, going line by line and commenting on themes/motifs as they show up in these lines

What did the speaker do well? • Ilya did an excellent job identifying and analyzing a slew of literary devices o Analyzes a good deal of both polysyndeton and alliteration o Also uses literary devices to speak to authorial purpose • Ilya also does a great job of talking about the transformation of the bakki from pleasure to necessity

What questions would you ask this person for clarification? • Why does Gordimer so often vary her sentence structure in this passage?

What should Ilya do to improve? • Ilya should try to use more sophisticated language in his commentary and try to stay away from colloquialism • Ilya should try to include more analysis of purpose and the importance of the poassge

What did Ilya forget to address? • Ilya forgot to address the difference between July’s People and July’s People

What would you score them base on the rubric: Knowledge and understanding: 4 Interpretation and personal response: 8 Presentation: 7 Use of Language: 4 23/30